六级写作经典范文及点评：自我介绍
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在日常生活中，我们常常需要作自我介绍。虽然是介绍最熟悉的自己，但是要想让别人听到以后有耳目一新的感觉却并不容易。来看看作者是怎样介绍她自己的。
Things about Me
I am Andrea. Perhaps the word “average”can best describe me. I am of average height, average weight and of average complexion. I have a thin face, double-lid eyes and a pointed nose. My hair is black, short and straight. I have never worn my hair long. I look like both my mother and my father, but I have inherited their best parts.
I am a teacher, and I like my job. I believe her or his students can sometimes teach a teacher. Actually I have learnt a lot from my own teaching experience and my students. One particularly good thing about being a teacher is that I am learning something new each day and thus making progress each day. This is wonderful. Of course the income is modest, but on the other hand, quite stable. I keep growing all the time. I find great rewards both monetarily and mentally.
I have many hobbies: reading books, raising pets, making dresses, etc. I like volleyball very much, but I can’t play it very often, because it is a team sport. It is difficult to get enough people to play volleyball with me. It’s a shame. I derive great pleasure from my hobbies①.
Generally speaking, I am open, honest and easy-going. I hate hypocrisy and injustice. Fairness is very important to me. I try to be fair in everything I do. I have great appreciation for physical and spiritual independence. I am a bit disorganized and impatient sometimes.
I don’t have many friends, but I do have a few. I have both male and female friends. We do sports together, go shopping together; and we exchange our views and ideas and share happiness and sadness. Of course we help each other if necessary.
I always consider myself a lucky person. I am lucky in my family, I am lucky in my career, I am lucky in my friendship, I am lucky in many things. In one word, I am lucky in life. I am really grateful for all these.
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行文点评
作者由表及里地介绍了自己的方方面面。第一段围绕average一词描写了外貌，先让读者在感官上对“我”有了总体的印象。第二段介绍职业以及职业给“我”带来了什么。第三段介绍兴趣爱好。第四段简述性格特征。第五段叙述与朋友间的友谊。最后作者用了6个“lucky”来总结全文。
文中每一段的主题都十分鲜明。语言简朴真实，行文流畅，简洁而鲜活地刻画了一个真实的“我”。
好文妙译
自我介绍
我叫安德里亚。也许“普通”一词最能形容我。我中等身材，不胖也不瘦，不白也不黑。我有一张瘦削的脸，双眼皮，翘鼻子，我乌黑的头发又短又直，从未留过长发。我长得既像妈妈又像爸爸，不过我继承了他们的优点。
我现在是一名教师，我热爱我的工作。我认为，一个老师有时也能从他(她)的学生那儿学到知识。事实上，从我的教书经历，从我的学生们那里，我学到了许多许多。当老师特别好的一点就是每天我都在学习新的东西，并因此而能够每天取得进步。这真是棒极了。当然，收入并不高。然而，换个角度看，收入却是相当稳定的。我一直都在不断进步，在金钱方面与精神方面我都得到丰厚的回报。
我的兴趣广泛，比如：读书，养宠物，制作衣服，等等。虽然我非常喜欢打排球，但由于这是一项团队运动，我不能经常去玩。要找到足够多的人同我一起打排球是很难的，这是一件令人遗憾的事。兴趣爱好给我带来了无穷的乐趣。
总的说来，我是一个外向、诚实而随和的人。我对任何虚伪和不公正都深恶痛绝。我极为珍视公平公正，对于所做的每一件事，我都尽力做到公平。我崇尚物质上和精神上的独立。不过，我有点儿不善计划，有时还会急躁、没耐性。
我朋友不多，却颇有几个相知好友，其中有男性也有女性。我和朋友们一起进行体育运动；一起逛街购物。我们交换各自的观点看法，共享欢乐，分担忧愁。当然，如若需要，我们必定相互帮助。
我一直都觉得自己是一个幸运的人。在家庭方面、在事业上、在交友方面、在许许多多方面，我都是幸运的。总之，我的生活是幸运的，我真的非常感激这一切的一切。
词汇斟酌
?complexion n.肤色，面色
?monetarily ad. 从金钱角度
?hypocrisy n.伪善，虚伪
佳句临摹
①【注释】derive sth from sth 从…获得…
【临摹】She derived no benefit from the course of drugs.她用了这个疗程的药后不见一点好转。
思如泉涌
To know oneself is true progress. 人贵有自知之明。
A good horse cannot be of a bad color. 良马的毛色不会差。
Things about Me
I am Andrea. Perhaps the word “average”can best describe me. I am of average height, average weight and of average complexion. I have a thin face, double-lid eyes and a pointed nose. My hair is black, short and straight. I have never worn my hair long. I look like both my mother and my father, but I have inherited their best parts.
I am a teacher, and I like my job. I believe her or his students can sometimes teach a teacher. Actually I have learnt a lot from my own teaching experience and my students. One particularly good thing about being a teacher is that I am learning something new each day and thus making progress each day. This is wonderful. Of course the income is modest, but on the other hand, quite stable. I keep growing all the time. I find great rewards both monetarily and mentally.
I have many hobbies: reading books, raising pets, making dresses, etc. I like volleyball very much, but I can’t play it very often, because it is a team sport. It is difficult to get enough people to play volleyball with me. It’s a shame. I derive great pleasure from my hobbies①.
Generally speaking, I am open, honest and easy-going. I hate hypocrisy and injustice. Fairness is very important to me. I try to be fair in everything I do. I have great appreciation for physical and spiritual independence. I am a bit disorganized and impatient sometimes.
I don’t have many friends, but I do have a few. I have both male and female friends. We do sports together, go shopping together; and we exchange our views and ideas and share happiness and sadness. Of course we help each other if necessary.
I always consider myself a lucky person. I am lucky in my family, I am lucky in my career, I am lucky in my friendship, I am lucky in many things. In one word, I am lucky in life. I am really grateful for all these.
［338 words］
行文点评
作者由表及里地介绍了自己的方方面面。第一段围绕average一词描写了外貌，先让读者在感官上对“我”有了总体的印象。第二段介绍职业以及职业给“我”带来了什么。第三段介绍兴趣爱好。第四段简述性格特征。第五段叙述与朋友间的友谊。最后作者用了6个“lucky”来总结全文。
文中每一段的主题都十分鲜明。语言简朴真实，行文流畅，简洁而鲜活地刻画了一个真实的“我”。
好文妙译
自我介绍
我叫安德里亚。也许“普通”一词最能形容我。我中等身材，不胖也不瘦，不白也不黑。我有一张瘦削的脸，双眼皮，翘鼻子，我乌黑的头发又短又直，从未留过长发。我长得既像妈妈又像爸爸，不过我继承了他们的优点。
我现在是一名教师，我热爱我的工作。我认为，一个老师有时也能从他(她)的学生那儿学到知识。事实上，从我的教书经历，从我的学生们那里，我学到了许多许多。当老师特别好的一点就是每天我都在学习新的东西，并因此而能够每天取得进步。这真是棒极了。当然，收入并不高。然而，换个角度看，收入却是相当稳定的。我一直都在不断进步，在金钱方面与精神方面我都得到丰厚的回报。
我的兴趣广泛，比如：读书，养宠物，制作衣服，等等。虽然我非常喜欢打排球，但由于这是一项团队运动，我不能经常去玩。要找到足够多的人同我一起打排球是很难的，这是一件令人遗憾的事。兴趣爱好给我带来了无穷的乐趣。
总的说来，我是一个外向、诚实而随和的人。我对任何虚伪和不公正都深恶痛绝。我极为珍视公平公正，对于所做的每一件事，我都尽力做到公平。我崇尚物质上和精神上的独立。不过，我有点儿不善计划，有时还会急躁、没耐性。
我朋友不多，却颇有几个相知好友，其中有男性也有女性。我和朋友们一起进行体育运动；一起逛街购物。我们交换各自的观点看法，共享欢乐，分担忧愁。当然，如若需要，我们必定相互帮助。
我一直都觉得自己是一个幸运的人。在家庭方面、在事业上、在交友方面、在许许多多方面，我都是幸运的。总之，我的生活是幸运的，我真的非常感激这一切的一切。
词汇斟酌
?complexion n.肤色，面色
?monetarily ad. 从金钱角度
?hypocrisy n.伪善，虚伪
佳句临摹
①【注释】derive sth from sth 从…获得…
【临摹】She derived no benefit from the course of drugs.她用了这个疗程的药后不见一点好转。
思如泉涌
To know oneself is true progress. 人贵有自知之明。
A good horse cannot be of a bad color. 良马的毛色不会差。